This one is only slightly better than the last. They share some problems, such as the bad effects (this one is somehow even worse!), but there are new issues with this one.

I have trouble believing the vampire's actor is in his thirties. He looks much too old for a 30 year old Olive to be interested in, let alone to have "girls falling at his feet".

It's almost funny how him being a vampire is set up as a mystery when it's extremely obvious. You'd think a witch of Olive's calibre would have been able to pick up on it.

Personally, I see their "romance" as a bit of compulsory heterosexuality on Olive's side. She has no interest in men for the first thirty years of her life, has a strange dream about this one man she met once, and believes they're meant to be together. Then she lives the rest of her life without ever being interested in anyone ever again.

And of course we get the classic TV trope of a witch and a vampire falling in love!

I joke about it being trope-y, but it does work for me here a lot better than it does in other places even just from the base premise what with the actors both being much much older than what you'd expect to see from this trope. Far too many vampire stories have hot young men falling in love with late-teen-early-20-somethings, but there's not enough love out there for the older vampires and older women. It's just a refreshing change of pace with the trope.

That said, the fact that she's a witch doesn't really come into play with this story at all, and if anything it detracts from it. You can write that she was blinded by love all you want, but a witch not cottoning on when she's told 'don't give me permission to come into your house' just doesn't work. The same goes for Hawthorne asking to be turned into a vampire, except to an even greater extent.

How short the story is as well doesn't do the story any favours, they try to cram the full arc of a vampire (comfort with a detached life -> finding attachment -> realising how soulless undeath is -> worrying you'll harm that attachment -> dusting yourself to protect your attachments) into like mabye15 mins. It just feels very rushed and I'm not a fan.

There's also some pretty poor editing here in places, the effects for the vampire dying are a bit comical, and you can tell they didn't have quite enough footage as it repeats the very end in reverse. Plus there's a moment where you're meant to see one thing in person, and one in the mirror, but they shot and cropped it in a way that you can still see the non-reflected arms waving in front of the mirror.

All in all, eh, it's fine, it has it's moment, but I'm not coming back to it any time soon.